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My Favourite Restaurant

This week you are going to be creating a recount all about your favourite restaurant. Think about all of the things you did getting to the restaurant and being at the restaurant.

Planning
Order
Planning notes
Intro: 5Ws
2 weeks ago, Because I was hungry, Me and my family, We ate all the food there. KFC.
Paragraph 1
We were going to Sylvia park KFC so we started to drive there.
Paragraph 2
We arrived and we got our order then we started eating.
Paragraph 3
We finished eating and then we paid. We then left after that.
Conclusion
I felt hangry, happy, full, and tired.

Now that you have finished your plan, start writing your story. Don’t forget:
Who, what, when, where, why to introduce the event.
Write it in an order of events.
Be descriptive, share as many details as you can.
Use correct sentence punctuation, and try experimenting with others.
Group your ideas into paragraphs.
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Start your writing here:

→A few weeks ago my family and I went to KFC because we were all hungry and starving. We decided that we wanted to go somewhere far away so we went to the KFC in Sylvia Park. It took about 15 minutes to get there but we arrived.

PARAGRAPH 1:
When we arrived we parked on the roof of the carpark and went inside. We parked next to the PaknSave but we went the other way because it was closer to the KFC. We parked near the Yum Char because there was no closer place to park. It took us about 2 minutes to walk there and while we were walking we were window shopping because my dad was calling somebody on the phone. I was looking at these very fancy shoes because they looked cool but I couldn’t buy anything because I spent all my money on food. My mum didn’t come with us because she was at work and she was working late that night so we were too hungry to wait for her. The KFC was kind of modern but at the same time there was a lot of rubbish inside, even on the grounds. I could tell that the people who ate there were lazy because they didn’t clean up their mess. While my dad ordered our food on the big board thingy, me and my brother went to go and find a table to eat at so we got one before everybody else came in and found a table.

PARAGRAPH 2:
When my dad finished ordering our food he came to sit at the table with us. My brother needed to go to the toilet so while we waited we also went to go and wash our hands because they have to be clean before we eat our food. When we all got back to the table our food was taking pretty long to order so we all just went on our phones while we waited. We saw more people coming through the door and on the table next to us there were two mums with their two daughters. The kids were very young so as the respectful person I am, I was being very kind to them. They didn’t even say thank you but that was okay because they are babies and they don’t know how to talk. Our food arrived and we were very hungry so we all dug in. There was spicy chicken, coleslaw, and the mashed potatoes, slimy thingy. There were also chips but I don’t like the chips as much as I like the spicy chicken dipped in the mash potatoes. The spicy chicken pieces were SO SMALL but it was fine because if I ate too much it would have burnt my tongue because that’s the only spicy thing that I like. I ate some chips too because they were still very yummy and tasty. We also got a drink but I don’t like fanta but I had no choice but to drink it because I was very thirsty. I had one and a half cups of it because I didn’t like the fizz in it so I didn’t finish it.

PARAGRAPH 3:
My whole family finished eating all their food but I hadn’t finished so they were all waiting for me so we could go home. I didn’t finish it all but they were rushing me to finish so I just left the rest of my food there. When I was still eating they were all staring at my food and other people inside the restaurant. We cleaned up our mess we made on the table and then put the rubbish in the bin because we didn’t want to make a mess for the waiter to clean up and also for the next table to eat. When we left the restaurant we waited outside on the benches there for my dad to finish another phone call. I was very full and felt very tired because I ate too much. When my dad finished on the phone we all got up and walked back to the carpark we parked in. When we were walking past again I was looking at the same shoes because I thought they looked cool and they would suit me. We then left because we all knew I couldn’t afford anything. There were heaps of restaurants we were walking past but then we got up to the ramp where the carpark was. In front of the carpark there was a cool sitting area where it was curved and it was like a really steep road to go up. I saw kids playing on it and there were also bird statues there that were like the height of a human. We saw the place where we parked and we went in the car and drove back home. We got home and then we did what we usually do on a normal day.

CONCLUSION:
DUring this whole journey I was feeling pretty tired because I ate too much, hungry because I still hadn’t eaten. And also hangry. I think that my dad and brother felt the same way as me because we were all hungry that’s why we went to KFC.

My Journey to School

This week you are going to be creating a recount all about your journey to school. Think about all of the things you did this morning to get yourself ready for school.

Planning
Order
Planning notes
Intro: 5Ws
In term 1 we had Fiafia, and it was outside under Te Kapua. We got to see everyone’s dance performances and even perform ourselves. We had to go because we were going to see everyone’s cultural dances they do and also fun ones like hiphop. Our whole school went and including the parents.
Paragraph 1
Getting ready to go back to school, arriving there and getting ready.
Paragraph 2
Our last practice. Getting changed and putting on the stuff we will wear.
Paragraph 3
Watching everybody perform before it was our turn. Seeing what everyone has practiced for at least 5 weeks.
Conclusion
I was scared, nervous, excited, and also there were butterflies in my stomach.

Now that you have finished your plan, start writing your story. Don’t forget:
Who, what, when, where, why to introduce the event.
Write it in an order of events.
Be descriptive, share as many details as you can.
Use correct sentence punctuation, and try experimenting with others.
Group your ideas into paragraphs.
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Start your writing here:

→In term 1 I was getting ready to go to school for fiafia (April). We had fiafia and our whole school was there. Our journey was a crazy one.

Fiafia is where we go to school in the late afternoon and perform a dance we have learnt for the past 5 weeks. We had it outside under Te Kapua at night and even the parents came. I had to get ready to go back to school because we needed to rush, we were in a hurry. Everybody from our school all needed to go on that night because if there are only a few people you won’t be able to have a big group.

Paragraph 1:
In term 1 we had Fiafia and I was a bit scared. I was at home practicing my dance on the TV for the last time before we left. As I was practicing my dance I realized that I’m gonna have to remember it because I needed to perform it on the stage. I was very scared because there was a few hundred people going to see my dance. When I finished practicing we only had an hour left before we went back to school so my nan did my hair. I was finished doing that so then I waited until it was time to go. On my way back to school I saw families walking around to go back to school as well. I was very nervous because I knew that those people were all going to be watching us and they were going to be judging our performance. It was beginning to get dark a bit outside and the sun was barely setting.

Paragraph 2:
Even though I live close to school it felt like I was going to be late because of the butterflies in my stomach. When we got out of the car in the distance I saw food stands. There was a cold breeze in the air and I knew we were going to have to perform on a really cold night. As we walked I saw kids in some of their uniforms they were wearing and it was very nice clothes because they were going to perform in them. I was very scared but then when I went inside the breeze I saw my friends and we went to go and play before it was time to go to get changed. We were walking around the school trying to find our other friends and they were just arriving. Most of my friends were in the Samoan group so they all left pretty early and I went with my other friend in the Niuean group. We were both waiting outside to let the teacher open the door. The door opened and then we went to get changed into our uniform. Everyone was wearing a white t-shirt and a black & yellow, designed lavalava. Everyone in my group went inside the bathrooms and we all finished. After everybody was in their uniform we had our last practice before we went outside.

Paragraph 3:
After we went on stage I was nervous and I was also very scared. I saw very blurry vision and also it was very dark because of how late it was. I saw kids cheering and people coming up to put money in the jar for our performance.

Conclusion.
Nervous, scared, excited, afraid and also a bit happy.

A Time that I did Well

Think about a time that you believe you did well. You will need to write a recount about this event. Don’t forget to include minor details to give more context to your writing.

Plan
Orientation
(5 Ws)
Who: The whole School.
What: Cross country. .
When: Last term in week 7 down to Pt England Beach.
Where:On the school field and outside the gate.
Why: Because we need to be fit and run around.
Paragraph 1
Getting ready to run, and sprint.
Paragraph 2
Jogging the whole way during it.
Paragraph 3
The end of the race, finally getting a rest.
Conclusion
I felt nervous and scared but also relieved I finished it.

Start your writing here
→ Last term In week 7 it was cross country on Friday. The reason that the whole school had to do it was because we had to be fit and start running so we can still be young and fit. I ran well and I finished without stopping.

I was running, jogging and sprinting all the way and I tried to not stop. Our whole school had to start our race on the school field and then run out the gate and run how far they have to.

PARAGRAPH 1:
In term 3 we had cross country and I think did well. In the morning we had to pick out the colour of the house we were in : blue(hine moana), red ( te aurere), yellow (hikianalia) and green (Hokulea). I am in yellow and I chose to wear a tutu with fun accessories. At the start of the day it was normal, what we would usually do. In the afternoon we started getting ready for cross country. Everyone was getting sent to the bathroom to wear their house colour while the rest were watching manaiakalani videos. We each got sent by our house colour and the wait was very long because we had to be patient for everyone to finish getting changed. It was then lunch playtime and the track was already finished and there were kids practicing on it for the actual race. Me and my friend Emilee were watching every body race, even the teachers were racing. There were little kids racing, big kids racing, and the year 7’s who were in the elite race. They were all practicing their running on where we all started the race.

PARAGRAPH 2:
When the bell rang it was finally time to go under te kapua and start the races. We were one of the middle people to do the race and I was very nervous because I felt butterflies in my stomach. When they called up the year 5 girls we all stood up and went to the race track. Mr Burt clapped the clapping thingy and we all sprinted! There were a few people in front of me so I tried catching up with them and I passed a lot of people. I was then almost in the front but I didn’t pass them. I was sprinting the whole way towards the gate and I didn’t stop. I passed the gate and I started running a bit slower to save my energy so I could run faster when there were more people in front of me. When they all passed me that’s when I started running faster and they were out of breath so I got in front of them. I was running and running and I only stopped when I couldn’t feel my breath. As I was running there were 7 people in front of me so when we passed the pole I passed one person and I was then standing in 7th place. I started slowing down and just jogged the rest of it. I only stopped when I felt like I needed to. I passed 2 year 7 girls who were in the race before us when we got up to one of the corners. There was a teacher waiting there cheering us all on while running. In front of me was Langeey, and she didn’t stop running. I got up to Miss Davis who was also cheering us on, telling us we can do it and don’t give up. I tried passing Langeey but she didn’t let me. She kept trying to keep up with me. I was too exhausted to keep up with her so I just took a little break. Victory was behind me, not too far off, she was pretty close to me. I tried running a bit faster than her so she couldn’t pass me. When we were getting to the end there were teachers cheering us on. Just before I passed the gate I looked behind me and I saw that Victory was starting to sprint so I ran as fast as I could to the gate and to the finish line. When we passed the gate there were cones to lead you to where you were supposed to go. I started sprinting more slowly because I was losing my energy. When I got to the finish line I saw Langeey lying on the ground from exhaustion.

PARAGRAPH 3:
When I got to the finish line I felt good in myself, I felt that I had succeeded in what I wanted to do. I went to sit back down and all my friends were saying what place they had come and congratulating each other. I was out of breath, I couldn’t feel my breath because of how tired I was. In the end I came 7th place out of the year 5 girls and I was hoping to at least come top 10. I was very happy with where I came from because it is a really good place. After that I watched the rest of the races at the start while cheering. I was cheering for yellow because I wanted them to win the races. We were a very fast house colour and there was a lot placing top 3. After all the races were finished and we were waiting for the last race to finish we all sat down on the side of the finish line and cheered for the people coming up. I was very happy while cheering because someone in yellow came close. We then went back to class and put on our shoes because the bell was about to ring. Then we all went home and told our families where we had placed. I told all my family what place I came and they were all proud, they said that I did good.

Conclusion:
During this race I was feeling tired, nervous, excited, scared,etc. It was very tiring to keep up with all the people because they were very fast. At the start of the race I was feeling nervous because there were a bunch of people watching us and I was feeling like I was getting pressured. While I was running I felt brave and tired. At the end I felt proud and happy.

Immersion Recount

Write a recount about what happened in our Immersion Assembly. Each team’s teachers had a performance to show the school what we will be focusing on this term.

Planning
SMT Senior Management Team
Singing along to the song Golden from K-pop Demon Hunters, Mr Somerville, Mr Burt, and Mr Jacobsen. All white clothes, colourful wigs, Microphones, and white masks.
Team 1
For team 1 they started with cooking scones. They made music with things they cooked with, and clean with. There was a broom and sprinkles.
Team 2
Team 2 did two different versions of different songs. The first one was scary music, the second version was peaceful music.
Team 3
Team 3 made music with cups. They learnt how to make music by just tapping cups on a table, and the cup song.
Team 4
Team 4 did what a teacher thinks in a school day. They have to teach the kids who are annoying them, they were being frustrated. They used different genres of music.
Team 5
Team 5 did a quiz, Students vs Teachers. It was a quiz between guess the country that the song was from. If you won you got yummy gummy.

Recount tips
In your introduction, make sure you set the scene. Make sure there is relevant information (who, what, when, where, why).
Your writing should be written in an order of events. Make sure everything that you write about is in order.
Edit your work and check to make sure it makes sense. Use the correct punctuation.

Start your writing here

→Yesterday in the morning we went to the school hall because we had an immersion assembly for the whole school. It was because it was the start of the term and the teachers were showing all of the kids what they were going to learn this year. Our principal Mr Burt was in charge, he told the teachers to make an immersion assembly movie or either present it on the stage at that moment, not all of them were recorded and put into a movie. Our whole school went that morning to watch everyone’s immersion assembly to see what they were all going to be learning about this term.

SENIOR MANAGEMENT TEAM:
Yesterday the senior management team that put together the performance was Mr Somerville, Mr Burt, and Mr Jacobsen. They sang the song Golden in K-pop Demon Hunters. They were all dressed the same, they wore, white pants, white shirts, white masks, and colourful wigs! They wore the same wigs as what Rumi, Zoey wore to the song. They were singing in fake microphones lip syncing the words and not actually saying it so the kids could say it instead. The year 1’s loved singing to it because they watch it a lot and they like it. Some of my class sang along to it as well. I liked the song they were singing to.

TEAM 1:
At the start of team 1’s movie it showed all of the teachers sitting at a table saying they were bored, Ms Hockley then mentioned them making scones for her and them as well! They agreed and started making the scones! It showed Ms Lal and Ms Courtez making the batch that they needed to make scones, Ms Courtez put half of the milk into a measuring cup and Ms Lal was mixing the cheese up in the bowl. When they finished making it they put it onto the stove and they were letting it cook.While it was in the oven they were cleaning up the mess they made when they were cooking, they were making music with what they were cleaning up with! Miss Shirley was shaking the sprinkles, Ms Lal was sweeping the broom, and Miss Courtez was using a spatula and a pot to play drums! The music was so good it was hurting my ears! It sounded like the beat to a song of rock n roll. When they were finished cleaning up the screen switched to them eating the scones that they made. Miss Hockley was so excited to have them because she was waiting for them to finish making it. When they finished they all sat down on the table and ate them. They were all eating them and they were saying that it was delicious and they all enjoyed eating it! Ms Hockley enjoyed it the most because she didn’t need to make them! I think that this year they are going to be learning that they can make music using anything even with the things you bake with. I enjoyed the team 1 movie because they were baking it.

TEAM 2:
Team 2 did 2 versions of the same video but different music. The first version was scary music, it made the video seem scary because of the sound it was playing in the background. The first clip was one of them running and it played serious music. The next version was just a polite song of them having a race and it was like they were running and having a good time. The next clip showed Ms Teleso finding a creepy chest and then unbuckling the clips and opening it. It seemed very scary because of the music because the music was creepy. The next version just played a soft song of her opening it seeming like it was going to be something calm in the chest. The last one was a video of the teachers climbing up the tree seeming like they were running away from something bad or evil. The other version is them having fun climbing up a tree. I liked how they were doing 2 different songs each clip.

TEAM 3:
For team 3 they were making music by just using cups. In the line it was Mrs Moala, Mrs Scanlan, Mrs Walker, and Mrs Sio. It started with Mrs Moala, then she passed it all the way back to the end of the line and they did it all at the same time. They were also doing the cup song and different kinds. They started with the cup song and they were also turning side ways doing it. They did a lot of different ways of doing it and I think they even made up their own ways. They were teaching us we can do anything by just using trash. They made it look very easy and fun and they showed us what they were learning this term.

TEAM 4:
I am in team 4 and the team 4 teachers did what a teacher thinks in a day. It first showed the teachers walking in the front gate getting ready to work. When they get in the classroom and start working with everyone they get frustrated and start lip syncing to a song saying it was making them mad. They borrowed a couple of our classmates and started saying it to them. The teachers showed us how they feel during the day because they feel so frustrated sometimes. It also played a lot of different songs and it was really fun. It was showing us what music genres there are with each different song. Some songs had a lot of energetic vibes, others had sad vibes, they were all different genres. I think this year we are going to be learning about different types of genres, also things like the tempo, melody, harmony, etc. I enjoy my teams movie because of the different song genres.

TEAM 5:
For team 5 they actually performed what they did in front of the school on the stage. They did a quiz and it was to guess what country the music was made in. There were 4 year 8 students that participated, 2 girls and 2 boys. They each had a turn at guessing and some were wrong but others were right. The team 5 teachers were the other team who were competing in the challenge. If you won then you got to get a bag of lollies and there were only four bags. The winners got to have them and eat them. There were a lot of questions about the countries and there were only 4 answers. Only one of them was right so it was pretty hard because all of the different music matched the country it was from. The countries had very traditional music and not all of them sounded like their country but other ones were easy to guess. Sometimes they weren’t actually guessing and they knew it but they mostly needed to. The teachers were doing pretty good and at the start the kids were struggling but everyone knew that they were gonna catch up. In the end there was about 10-20 questions. The score was 1500-1499 to the students and they won the loli bags! They all got one each and then they got off the stage. All the kids were happy but not the teachers because they thought they won. In the end the teachers lost.I enjoyed watching the quiz because the students won.

This term I am looking forward to learning about different genres of music. There are different types and I am excited to hear about most of them. I am also looking forward to listening to more music about different stuff because it would be nice to learn about more different songs.